So its monday?

Hello Loyal readers. Happy New Year, And welcome to Life In Fiction.
This week I chose some lyrics I wrote to a song... I wrote this a long long time ago, but wanted to see what you think.


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(Intro Line)
Unforgivably torn.
I know my destiny.
Its an oath I've sworn.
This change will last an eternity!

(Verse 1)
The shapes of the monsters are forming...
A palace full of hatred eats at my heart...
the soldiers and their dogs are storming...
the enemy looks on... waiting for the battle to start...

(Pre Chorus)
Hearts are pounding
heads are spinning
is this the beginning?

the record is replaying
screaming "my love for you is fading!"
I can't help you, its all over and done...

(chorus)
But I will bring change
for the sons!
And the storms will come!
I will feel every drop!


(Post Chorus)
my senses were in tact....
Hello future... Goodbye past...

(Intro 2)
Shadows that strive...
their shapes reforming
and lies revive!
Who Am I fooling now?

(verse 2)
Wake up my darling, open your eyes
see the clouds fade from the skies...
for your heart is now bleeding,
from the pain that you've been feeding...

(Pre Chorus 2)
Hearts are pounding
heads are spinning
when will I stop pretending..
that your here!?

the record is replaying
screaming "my love for you is fading!"
I can't help you, its all over and done...

(chorus)
But I will bring change
for the sons!
And the storms will come!
I will feel every drop!

(Post Chorus)
for my senses were in tact....
Hello future... Goodbye past...

(Ending)
Hearts are pounding
heads are spinning
we can call this the ending...
The storm was the beginning...

for my senses were in tact...
hello future goodbye past...

And the record is replaying the song...
screaming "My love for you is fading and gone..."
(Repeat and Fade Out)

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I really love the line "The record is replaying, screaming 'My love for you is fading"
It captures what the song was about at the time, it was a time of heartbreak, and It helped me get through that painful time.

I would love your feedback.

much love
Joseph W.